Dark love......?

Left to die a thousand times over


Your love is true and pure


My love will label you diseased and unwanted


Your love will be treasured my others


Mine will be buried and forgotten


My heart bleeds from holding your image


As your hand would from a roses thorn


Your love for me dies with my own death


But my love lives on long after my demise


I searched for love in the past


As a dying man searches for water


What I felt never did matter to anyone


You tried to pull me out of the darkness


I took hold of your hand and sucked you in


You are free, I will never be


I was blinded by my own hands


You took your key and opened my heart


Now you’re locked in


You loved me, but not when I’m gone and you will never love again


I will wait for you on the other side


How can you run from


A dying mans undying dark love

Dark love......?
Your poem is quite extraordinary; the images are powerful and darkly beautiful. I love this.
Reply:-Once again a brillant masterpiece!!!!!!!
Reply:I enjoyed this tale very much,


well done.
Reply:DK...you really need to run a spell checker on your poems :) Other than the spelling errors, I'd suggest indenting lines or finding another way to show counter-points...e.g.





Your love is true and pure; my love will label you diseased and unwanted


Your love will be treasured by others; mine will be buried and forgotten





or





Your love is true and pure


... My love will label you diseased and unwanted


Your love will be treasured by others


... Mine will be buried and forgotten





It enhance the counterpoint issue...and the reader, if reading this out loud, would understand it would be said with a different voice or emotion.





There are a few contradictory images, but otherwise it has a natural voice of the condemned and doomed...a dark piece about dark love.





fitting...keep writing
Reply:I don't wanna comment on the many typo errors because you should realize it by now, given that i have always been pointing out the same thing over and over again. (check line 4 %26amp; last line)


I really love this poem as it encapsulates the notion of "unconditional love". I am very much a devoted fan of "unconditional love". A love that withstand every single challenge, including the death of the beloved. This is your best piece so far. 10/10. Excellent! =)
Reply:I definitely enjoyed reading this.





You've got a gift - keep writing!
Reply:Wow





Im Speachless








thats is one beautiful poem
Reply:This one one of the best poems i've ever read! Very, very nice write more please!

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